comic page tryout

what do you guys think? \o/
it's not colored because i have to work quickly and also i'm lazy :F

but the main point should be the linework and composition and shit like that. i'm in fact a total newb when it comes to comics and here i was finally able to kick my ass and draw something properly. you think it might be bearable if i made a comic in kinda this style?

also, the story isn't very important, just something that happened to my friend and almost even to me llD
when you have a cig in your mouth and it sticks onto your lip, not very pleasant.

my charas Chester Chaz, Saul Skorzeny and Gill Srnka <3